>>7571886
things i like
>the character designs
they are super creative and unique
>artstyle
it works for what you are doing

things that could use work:
>story telling
i feel lost at times and the story is hard to follow
random things are introduced and not explained
scene transitions are not smooth at all- very jarring too
i want to understand your story because it looks interesting
>long paragraphs
decide if you want a comic or a novel with pictures
>paneling
try trhinking about where your reader's eye is drawn to first
try using more show don't tell rule

do not listen to those other assholes DO NOT give up
your story has interesting ideas but you just need to study how to do comics and focus on writing engaging, coherent stories
work on packing info into panels without dropping a random wall of text as it ruins the pacing. Long paragraphs can work but that leaves less room for illustrations.
imagine a movie where the narrator never shuts up, or a character who speaks for 10 mins straight all. the. time... it would get annoying fastt right?

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