>>212420716
No. It's bad because its too long and contains too many steps.
>part 1: we are the spark
>part 2: that will light the fire
>part 3: that will burn...down
It's far too long. Brevity is key; make it short and snappy.Why didn't thy just remove part 2?
>we are the spark that will burn the first order down
It's shorter and to the point.
I don't want to be called a retarded african, but I will repeat anon with trips >>212420777. Burning things down is is too aggressive.
I like his, but it's still too long. My suggestions are:
>we are the spark of the rebellion
>we are the spark that keeps the rebellion lit
That's why I thought it was bad.

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